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ANOTHER Hot Rod Movie Idea

Discussion in 'The Hokey Ass Message Board' started by JimA, Feb 11, 2008.

  1. JimA
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    Been working on this script for a while with another HAMBer. Has most of the skeleton worked out- but a few of the exciting scenes still need to enhanced- and storyboards made to illustrate some of the high points. When you think of the the evil car in the story think of a beat up Flathead powered version of 3-Window Larry's car and you are there. Thanks for all the inspiration, Jim

    FADE IN:

    EXT. COASTAL ROAD - DAY

    Looking into the carb, the butterflies open, close, open. The engine cranks over in time with the music. A roar erupts as the engine fires and revs in time with the music. Louder, softer, loud again.

    Pulling back a bit we follow the fuel line rearward. From above we see the entire engine. We drop down to follow the throttle linkage, music dancing to the movement of the linkage and the rumble of the pipes.

    FX

    Into the firewall and down to the accelerator pedal. A heavy well-worn “engineer’s boot” taps out revs, matching the music.

    A trickle of green electricity crackles here and there as the engine bangs out something that sounds like a scream along with its mechanical noises, blended with wails of a surf guitar.

    Back inside, we follow the shaft of the painted shifter to the skull shift knob. A gloved hand drops onto the skull and pulls it into first gear.

    From above we track the coupe as it rolls through the low coastal hills.

    Close in on details of the coupe as it rumbles along with the music. Each part exudes menace or a hidden threat.

    See the wheel as it brakes… slides forward with a chirp and stops.

    From overhead see the entire dark coupe.

    Coupe stops at a “mom and pop” store for information. Hear no conversation, but the old store keeper seems reluctant? No. He looks frightened by the man in the coupe. The old man points in the direction the coupe is heading.

    The coupe leaves. The old man seems sick or shaken. An old woman comes to him from the store, seeking to help him or to understand.

    The coupe moves on down the road, stopping at a roadside stand. Through the chopped window we see the dark back of the driver as he talks to a frightened woman who shakes her head. More details of the coupe are explored as we hear footsteps of the driver open then close the door. Revs come up and the coupe screams up the road.

    The voice that sounds like a scream is heard. And now heard faintly, mixed with road noise... menacing sounds that may be curses, but are too indistinct.

    EXT. AT THE BEACH - DAY

    The coupe drives up on the beach where some other cars are parked. Surfers and a few others hanging out, at first they point and laugh. The coupe comes to a forceful stop. Exiting the coupe, the dark form moves toward a group. We can’t hear what they say, but two or three in the group sidle away from the group a little afraid.

    DENNIS
    That’s his brother out there.
    That’s Skip.

    DRAGICH
    I don’t want his brother. I want to know where
    Buck is.

    ROSE
    He’s at Steve’s shop.

    DRAGICH
    Steve who?

    DENNIS
    Baily. Steve Baily. He's Buck and
    Skip's uncle.

    DRAGICH
    Where?

    Sensing the other's fear, Rose steps up to confront the dark thug. Something of a challenge to see how her friends would react.

    ROSE
    His shop is in town. Take a left on
    Sundown, up half a block.

    Trying to show Rose that he has no fear Rod leans in as if to confront the driver.

    ROD
    Why do you want Buck?

    DRAGICH
    Fuck you.

    EXT. FROM THE SHORE - DAY

    In the distance we see SKIP, a week away from his 16th birthday, waiting to catch the perfect wave heading to the shore. From his board he can see some of the cars leaving following the dark coupe. He swears softly when he sees his friend’s truck following the others. Looking over his shoulder he moves to catch the next wave in to shore.

    The boy rides in. Anger crosses his face as he sees Jeff's truck leaving the beach. He is disgusted at the meager wave that takes him toward shore.

    From the board we see that only two cars remain on the beach. Don’s Model T Roadster and a ‘50 Ford sedan.

    The young surfer nimbly slips off the board, grabs it and runs up to the cars with five of his pals, Dennis, Rod, Rose, Jim and Don.

    SKIP
    Where did Jeff go?

    DON
    With all the rest of them headed
    across town. That bad dude in the
    dark coupe is looking for
    Buck.

    SKIP
    Why? Who is this "bad dude?" What
    does he want with Buck? Doesn't that
    stupid Jeff know I need the truck to
    get my board back?

    ROD
    He didn't seem too tough to me.

    SKIP
    Who gives a shit? How am I gonna
    get my board back? Jeff’s gone in the
    truck.

    DON
    You’ll have to hang it off the back
    and hang on tight. Jim will have to
    ride with Dennis and them.

    SKIP
    Shit.

    EXT. CITY STREETS - DAY

    We see the COUPE from above followed by a ’54 Chevy mild custom (ROBIN JENKS and BARBARA CRAIG, CLAYTON FILIAN and
    ELAINE KERR), ’46 Mercury coupe (CHET CAVALIER and KATHY
    FLOOD), ’49 Chevy (CLARENCE BEAVERS, ROZ IMMER, KEITH HARRIS and JOHN BISCHOFF), ’48 F-1 (JEFF TEDESCO) and a ’55 Mercury Wagon (PHIL FILIAN, NANCY HENDERSON, NICK BARBER, JON EITELBACH).

    INT. COUPE - DAY

    The COUPE DRIVER’S eyes are reflected in the rearview mirror, glimmering with contempt and malice at the cars that follow him. He sees the street sign --

    EXT. COUPE FROM THE REAR - DAY

    --and whips the coupe into the quick left turn on Sundown. The coupe accelerates away with a rumble of the flathead’s pipes. The undertones of the coupe's voice, mutters "closer" with a hiss.

    Leaning into the turn at Sundown, BARBARA turns to ROBIN

    BARBARA
    ROBIN! Slow down! What are you
    doing anyhow?

    ROBIN
    We gotta see what this guy’s up to.
    He may be looking to fight Buck.
    That's something I gotta see.

    BARBARA
    But why? You are going to get us
    killed driving like this. You know
    where he's going so slow down, please!

    CLAYTON
    Awww... he can handle it. Cut down
    on that mighty six you're herding
    there, Robin.

    INT. FROM THE FRONT SEAT LOOKING BACK.

    ELAINE
    I want to go home, please.

    BARBARA
    I still don't see why we care about some
    greaser hood. Can’t be anything but trouble. And
    who cares anyhow?

    CLAYTON
    We do! If he's gonna fight Buck we don't
    want to miss it. If he just wants to race...
    hell... ahh heck, I mean... we know Buck
    will blow his doors off.

    EXT. COUPE AT AXLE LEVEL - DAY

    Coupe stops at stop sign. The driver guns it across the street. Braking noisily in front of Baily’s Garage.

    Rev’s it up to get the attention of those inside.

    INT. GARAGE – LOOKING OVER SHOULDERS OF BUCK AND TERRY

    Coupe rumbles noisily as the following cars pull up across the street in the b.g. Buck starts out.

    EXT. LOOKING INTO THE SHOP

    STEVE WALKS UP BEHIND TERRY.

    STEVE
    What’s all the noise? What’s Buck
    up to?

    TERRY
    Don't know.

    EXT. GARAGE

    BUCK squats next to the passenger side of the coupe. We don’t hear an exchange, but see the anger. Driver steps out, menacing, pointing at Buck. Shouting. Slams back into the coupe and as Buck walks away a dark hand with an extended finger pops from the passenger window.

    DRAGICH
    Coward!

    Or was it the chirp of the tires calling out "coward?" Sounds from the pipes as the coupe goes up the hill are evil mutterings... another chirp. Distinctly heard, COWARD!
     
  2. HOTRODPRIMER
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    HUH?:rolleyes:

    Read my by line,,,FLATHEADS AIN'T DEAD,,

    The word plagiarism comes to my mind!:D HRP
     
  3. JimA
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    Words- you read them and it makes a story IN YOUR HEAD. That's at least what I was told it was like before the internet and U-tube.

    Above is just 6 pages out of a 100 page script.
     
  4. HOTRODPRIMER
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    I'm just pokin' fun,,,HRP
     
  5. Hackerbilt
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    You had me in the zone Jim!
     
  6. JimA
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    No- they aren't. And this one is tuned by the Devil! The story is set in 1966, when Flatheads were pretty much as out of style as ever, but this one will make plenty of people in the story take notice.
     
  7. I had the best intentions of reading it all, but i'm afraid I don't have the attention span.
     
  8. hillbillyhell
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    Can you maybe read it aloud, like a book on tape, and post it on YouTube for me? I'm all crosseyed, t'was a long day.
     
  9. JimA
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    I'd reply, but...
     
  10. JimA
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    The big kid that works at my shop will do one better- He'll come over and act out ALL the characters in your garage! He's good- you'll love it!
     
  11. will chuck norris have a part in this celluloid extraviganza?:D
     
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  13. plan9
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    its a neat idea... if you have storyboards cut them together with timing and dialogue... because the average hamb'r wont know how to visualise it.

    you can really cut your budget down by 86'ing the FX part in the beginning, keep the idea but use only practical shots.
    CG and practical FX will eat up a good portion of a film budget.... and whats worse, if it isnt done right it will set a bad presidence forthe rest of the movie.

    i have been working in the vfx business for 5 yrs now, i spent 6 yrs learning about it. i do this stuff everyday on the computer, stay away from CG, it'll break your movie.
     
  14. JimA
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    Thanks Mike- I tried NOT to think of the direct to video crap horror movies at block buster that look like they were filmed at Paramount Ranch over a 3 day shoot, but instead as a big budget deal that can be tightened back if someone got serious. I think I might have to go with a serious novel or graphic novel first to get the proper interest. It's just too visual for the average reader to comprehend without pictures.
     
  15. Cshabang
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    A beat up 3 window with a Flattie...you mean like Ken Schmidts of Rolling Bones...haha
     
  16. JimA
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    Similar, but I want the coupe to appear as once being REALLY nice, painted, chromed and upholstered. But after living past its prime and years of abuse it's pretty scarred, weathered and worn like a 50 year old prize fighter.
     
  17. plan9
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    hey jim, if you want to talk about film budgets and the bidding process i can help a bit... i deffinately dont know it all and wouldnt want to come across as one b/c there are people that can run circles around me with their know how. ;)


     
  18. Cshabang
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    gotcha...
     
  19. JimA
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    Open to any help or advice I can get. Not enough big screen hot rod flicks- would love to be a part of such a rare commodity.
     
  20. Corn Fed
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    Jim,
    To keep you budget down, for free I'll play the part of the dopey bib overall wearing kid who pumps gas at the local station. How's this? Me: "Filler up with Ethyl?" Dragich: "Yeah, and don't lose the cap." Me: "No sir, never forgot one yet."

    Riviting scene eh? Please be sure to list my name correctly in the credits.
     
  21. Sam F.
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  22. ........I agree............and dreams do come true to those that dare to try........good luck with the production. I hope it gets off the ground.....and let us know when you have a casting call.
     
  23. jonnycola
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    You could call it "More or less American Grafitti."
     
  24. 3wLarry
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    So...I need to "age" the coupe some...take out the sbc and put in the flathead from the hambster...I'm in! :D
     
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  25. JimA
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    Larry- I could NEVER see your beat up- but it could be used in a flashback scene to an earlier point in the movie when the bad guy dealt with the two main characters father. PERFECT! Then clones could be built and flogged on for the later point in the story. With a hood you don't have to worry about changing a thing.
     
  26. JimA
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    Excellent!

    Just so people know. I have gone to great lengths to have as much period correctness involved in the story as possible. It's a lifetime of research as my father graduated in 1966 and was the same age as most of the main characters- and drove the same car as the eventual hero car- a 1956 Chevy. He attended High School in the same place as the story is set, and one of his best friends is named Dragich- so again it's not just totally made up from some out of thin air fantasy. I've paid many respects to American Graffiti that the true fans will pick up subliminally.
     
  27. Off your meds again Jim?
     
  28. Corn Fed
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    Sweet. When can we start shooting? I can't wait to become a big wheel and have the all the orcabetties swooning at my feet.
     
  29. Sam F.
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    you should colaborate with GERM,,,,he could add some great stuff
     

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